Project #36205 - Review & Rewrite Essay

ASSIGNMENT

  1. Review the writing process for argument essays.
  2. READ OVER THE ESSAY BELOW AND REWRITE IT TO MATCH THE GRADING RUBRIC!
  3. DONT FORGET TO INCLUDE MLA CITATIONS
  4. Revise and complete a final draft of the Argument Essay.
  5. Review the Grading Rubric before submitting your work.

GUIDELINES MUST FOLLOW!!!

Mastery Achieved

Approaching Mastery

Writer's Craft

21–30
You have identified with excellence your claim, counterclaim, support, and rebuttal in the argument essay.

Six Traits

21–30
You have revised your essay to addresswith excellence the six traits: ideas, organization, voice, word choice, sentence fluency, and conventions.

MLA Citations

16–20
You have written an argument essay withparenthetical documentation and aWorks Cited page with no noticeable errors in formatting.

Complete Essay

9–10
You have written with excellence a complete essay of at least fourparagraphs including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Spelling/Grammar

9–10
You have written complete sentences withno noticeable errors in spelling and/or grammar.

 

 

 

ESSAY TO REWRITE: 

With new technological developments, we see that most cars are equipped with radios, music player, video player, Bluetooth connectivity, etc. However, use of phones especially the smart phones is on rise. In this digital and technological era, experiments and taking risks has become order of the day. Using of Public Service Announcement to reduce distracted driving cannot be considered as very effective tool. As many of the drivers especially the younger generations have become addicted to their cell phones either to call friends or keep themselves updated with the social networking websites such as Facebook, Twitter, and Instagram etc. This addiction makes them neglect the risks of their misdemeanors.

                Public Service Announcements as a way to solve distracted driving is not very viable as people hardly pay attention to the real message. They hear, see, and forget, the impact of the announcement is temporary. In this case, a mere announcement will not have an impact as compared to consequences that are brought forward to ensure that people are aware of the implications. Human beings respond proactively when consequences are shown, for example: to stop a certain habit or to start a new habit. Given this fact, it is impossible to rely completely on Public Service Announcements to reduce distracted driving, the real consequences needs to be highlighted so that they can feel the pain of families who have been affected by distracted driving.

Our desire to assume and our attitude to take risks is another factor which has led to the failure of adhering to the Public Service Announcement. Many people thinks that they can do multi- tasking even while driving which is a very risky behavior, as by doing so one is not only risking their live but also lives of other commuters. Nelson et. al. (2009) indicated that although a person believes that it may be risky to talk on a cellular phone while driving, they still will initiate a call if they believe the call to be important.

Making Public Service Announcements have been of little help till date. Since 2009, U.S. Department of Transportation launched an aggressive national campaign to end the dangerous practice of distracted driving. Yet we come across many accidents related to use of cell phones while driving. Making Public Service Announcements is a special effort to make people aware of the risk they poses because of their careless act.

Nevertheless, Public Service Announcements is considered as one of the best ways to alert the drivers of their act and consequences. Yet there are challenges which needs to be corrected. Public Service Announcements should be spread across the social networking sites in the country as use of media like television and other channels that are not linked to social media. Which could mean that the information does not reach the entire population apart from those that use these channels of communication.

 

Hence, it is not very sensible to use Public Service Announcement as people associate distracted driving to lack of understanding the basic rules of traffic, as to some people, it is acceptable as long as you as not breaking any traffic rules. So, though Public Service Announcement may not be as effective as thought so. We need to find better means like proper training and seminars to the young drivers of the consequences and impact of distracted driving. So, that there can be improvements in their attitude and behavior, not only driving. 

Subject English
Due By (Pacific Time) 07/24/2014 12:00 am
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