Project #50128 - revise the argument paper

The outline for the paper

Brief history of U.S. tradition- a country of immigration.

1. Why is it a problem( Nazario)

2. Solution Obama's proposal

3.rebuttal

Conclusion

-Should talk more about the book in the second paragraph. For example, describe a little bit of the difficulties the boy had to face being an immigrant and make a point that his situation is similar to many other immigrants.

-Should change the thesis to something like the U.S. is like the nation with the biggest number of immigrants and it is such a diverse nation because of the many and different groups of people, cultures, blah blah blah immigrating to the U.S.; however, the issues of immigration is ... And the sentences about Obama and his reform should be put in the later paragraphs.

-Change "put forth" to brings up, claims, makes a point of, states, etc.

-Give more evidence or examples of the past immigrant laws that were "obsolete and outdated and did no good."

-Should have some charts or data or statistics to further support my claims

- The last sentence in the last paragraph should be moved to the paragraph where talks about criminal stuff. The last sentence should be like( immigration needs to be adjusted within the American society to ensure fair and judicious treatments for everyone as much as possible)

-should give more examples of how the old immigration laws didn't really help the immigrants, like how bad their situations remained still.

Subject English
Due By (Pacific Time) 12/03/2014 08:00 pm
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