Project #57092 - Revising a review essay paper

This is my essay:

 

Mother: The God of All

            I wake up with the luscious smell of pancakes and coffee. The house is wafting with the delicious smell and I am already drooling as I get up from the bed. My bed is warm and soft. From a distance I can hear a soft humming of sings and the light clangs of crockery and other cookware being handled in the kitchen. The smell is invoking my hunger and I get up from the bed and go straight to the kitchen. I see the woman I love the most in this world, my mother. She is cooking and as usual is humming songs with it. Cooking and singing are her hobbies and she puts them to use together often. She is packing lunch for daddy and seeing me she gives that endearing smile that only she has and asks me if I slept well. I am already too hungry to respond as I rush to brush my teeth. While brushing the thought crosses my mind that having a mother is the best thing in the world. My mother is the best of all because she is everything to me.

            Mother is the reason of the existence of every single individual in this world. She is the one who bears so much pain to bring a life to this world. Mother is the one who takes care of everything and everyone in the family. She is the unit that binds the family together and keeps them united. Mother completes everyone’s requirements and she is always there in case of any problem or even if there is no problem. Mother binds all relationships and she is the source of strength to the family. Caring, compassionate, loving, strong and sweet, a mother is a lot more than just a woman. She is the only individual in the earth who would fight for her children till her last breath. Mother not only takes care of the physical needs of her children but she is also a strong supporting system. She is the one everybody can rely upon. Mother is the incarnation of God and she is the one who makes life worth living.

            My mother is a simple woman and she belives strongly in God and family values. She takes active part in all the religious activities that are organised in the community and family. In our family she is the respected for her positive attitude and helping nature. She is compassionate and helps everyone to her best extent possible. My mother has inculcated values that have made me responsilbe and self-dependent. She has brought me up in a way that I can proudly say that I have accomplished the duties of a good human being in life. I give complete credit to her of whatever I am in life. She has developed me as a strong yet sensible individual and she constantly helps me in making the best of every opportunity that comes to me. 

            One cannot deny it. Having a mother is the biggest blessing of God one can have. Mothers are the greatest influence on people until they learn myriad things about the world and they remain to be the guiding source in the lives of several people even when they grow up and develop the cognition of worldly matters. Mothers are inspirational. They create the symmetry in the world that makes the nature balance its elements so perfectly. They are the driving force in the family. My mother is one of those people who dotes on her child and does everything possible for him to keep him happy. My mother is the most important person to me as she helps me in everything. She is always there for me and never leaves me alone. Whenever I have fallen in a dilemma about anything be it my studies or personal issues, she has been there to guide me through it. Her love makes me strong and she always understands me without judgment. Her love makes me open to her and I can talk to her about everything.

            Mother is the best shelter one can go to but people sometimes ignore the importance of having a mother. My mother is my friend, philosopher and guide. She is very careful towards her family and puts in her best effort to keep us all happy. We are very lucky to have her around. The best part is that she knows what role to play and when. Her protective instincts have always saved us from troubles and her advice is something that cannot be ignored. I consider my mother to be my best friend forever as she is the one who never left me alone and always helped me fight with challenges. Not that she fought my fights but she has always taught me how to deal with the obstacles of life without losing courage. Of course there are some people who make the mistake of ignoring their mothers and not listening to their advice but they too have failed in life. In the longer run they have understood that it is only mother who will stand by your thick and thin. She will be the only well-wisher who will never come in your way but will always stand in harm’s way if ever it looks at you. People who ignore the advice of their mothers have some or the other way paid for it. People must understand the importance of having their mother in their lives and they should respect them.

            Thus, thinking so much about the importance of mother is not going to make any difference unless we do something about it. Mothers are the driving force and they stay with us throughout our lives. My mother is the best one in the world because she has been there for me ever since I have gained the senses. She has completed all my requirements and she is still there with me. I cannot imagine my life without her. She is the think-tank for me and every time I have seen bad times I have find her to be there to guide me throughout it. I would also request everyone to take care of their mothers as they are the most precious relation people can have and they should not be ignored in any case. My mother has supported me emotionally and physically. She has taken care of me when I was sick and she has helped me get over with the harsh emotions of life.  

 

Teachers' feedback: 

provide specific examples in each qualities mentioned.

put counterarguments

put recap at the end of essay about the qualities. Does it meets the criteria of an ideal mother?

 

What I need you to do is you can either rewrite or change the paragraphs into something which has the structure of the essays that i uploaded

 

 

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Due By (Pacific Time) 02/09/2015 11:59 pm
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