Project #97823 - Basic English Grammer Check (TOEFL Writing Practice)

 

Please help on grammar/vocabularies check on below. Also please do not worry about A’s/B’s. These will be applied later.

 

 

 

<Motivate> Template

 

 

 

To begin with, As(A’s the plural form) motivate lots of people. It is no secret that competition can be a powerful source of motivation. It is common for people to compete with one another for great results and rewards. Sometimes, people just want to do better than other people so that they can feel superior over others. According to a study conducted by a team of researchers at Harvard University, people put in more effort when placed in a competitive environment, and the strongest motivation comes from A. The study also reveals that this correlation gets even stronger as each person wants to in a better position. As the study shows, As(A’s the plural form) have more profound influence on people than Bs(B’s the plural form) do.

 

 

 

Grounds1- Logical)

 

It is no secret that competition can be a powerful source of motivation. It is common for people to compete with one another for great results and rewards. Sometimes, people just want to do better than other people so that they can feel superior over others.

 

 

 

Grounds2 -Example)

 

According to a study conducted by a team of researchers at Harvard University, people put in more effort when placed in a competitive environment, and the strongest motivation comes from A. The study also reveals that this correlation gets even stronger as each person wants to in a better position.

 

 

 

 

 

<Practical Help> Template

 

 

 

To begin with, as far as (XXX) is concerned, As(A’s the plural form) are able to provide more practical help(advice). In many cases, Bs(B’s the plural form) are not knowledgeable on A’s fields, therefore, Bs are unable to help them. In contrast, A can effectively assist with the materials (which they work together in their fields). For example, I used to use(ask) my B to help me with my (XXX), but B의 대명사 often found them quite difficult to solve, which made it very stressful (both of us). Therefore, I had to use(ask) my A for assistance, and it worked out well. Had it not been for A’s help, I would have had a hard time in my field.

 

Grounds1- Logical)

 

In many cases, Bs(B의 복수형) are not knowledgeable on A’s fields, therefore, Bs are unable to help them. In contrast, A can effectively assist with the materials (which they work together in their fields).

 

 

 

Grounds2 -Example)

 

For example, I used to use(ask) my B to help me with my 문제, but B의 대명사 often found them quite difficult to solve, which made it very stressful (both of us). Therefore, I had to use(ask) my A for assistance, and it worked out well.

 

 

 

 

 

<The Internet Hinders> Template

 

 

 

 To begin with, the Internet often hinders people from A by being a source of distraction. It is a well-known fact that there is an excessive amount of information on the Internet from (A’s Example will be added) to light-hearted video clips. Some information is practical, while other forms are purely for entertainment. When people try to A on the Internet, there is too much temptation to visit other entertaining websites. According to a study conducted by a team of researchers at Harvard University, more than two-thirds of the surveyed people mentioned that they wasted an average of two hours per day on the Internet watching or reading useless materials instead of using their time constructively for A. The survey also found that when people were prohibited from using the Internet, their concentration improved by twenty percent, and they performed better in A than others who were allowed to use the Internet freely. As a result, the Internet disrupts people’s A and their concentration.

 

 To summarize, I object to the idea that the Internet benefits people’s ability to A. This is because the Internet is the major cause of people’s poor concentration and time management. Furthermore, As far as people’s A are concerned, the Internet does more harm than good.

 

 

 

 

 

본론1

 

소주제문)

 

우선, 인터넷은 종종 방해의 요소로써 사람들이 A하는 것을 방해한다.

 

To begin with, the Internet often hinders people from A by being a source of distraction.

 

 

 

 

 

Grounds1- Logical)

 

It is a well-known fact that there is an excessive amount of information on the Internet from (A’s Example will be added) to light-hearted video clips. Some information is practical, while other forms are purely for entertainment. When people try to A on the Internet, there is too much temptation to visit other entertaining websites.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Grounds2 -Example)

 

According to a study conducted by a team of researchers at Harvard University, more than two-thirds of the surveyed people mentioned that they wasted an average of two hours per day on the Internet watching or reading useless materials instead of using their time constructively for A. The survey also found that when people were prohibited from using the Internet, their concentration improved by twenty percent, and they were better in A than others who were allowed to use the Internet freely.

 

 

 

 

 

Summary

 

To summarize, I object to the idea that the Internet benefits people’s ability to A. This is because the Internet is the major cause of people’s poor concentration and time management. Furthermore,

 

 

 

 

 

<Relieve Stress & Promote Relationships> Template

 

 

 

To begin with, A can be an effective way of relieving stress. People today suffer from stress, and most people appreciate A that help them to obtain relief from the rigors of life. A is one of the most practical and affordable ways to relax. Of course, some might find (B’s strength). In contrast, the majority of people find such B rather stressful. Most people want to do As(A’s the plural form) that make them laugh. According to a study conducted by a team of researchers at Harvard University, As(A’s the plural form) were the most favored thing(way). More than two-thirds of the participants mentioned that they preferred A which can dazzle them with (A’s strength). In the same way, I definitely prefer A when I want to get rid of my stress.

 

Furthermore, A can play an important role in promoting good relationships with others. When friends or family members gather together, they always try to find ways to enjoy their time together. A can be the answer. A puts people in good spirits and connects people by letting them laugh together. On the contrary, Bs(B’s the plural form) can provoke arguments and even emotional conflicts.

 

To summarize, there is little doubt that we should appreciate both B and A. However, I think A is better than B considering the facts that most people do A to laugh away their troubles and to spend time with their loved ones.

 

 

 

Grounds1 -Logical)

 

People today suffer from stress, and most people appreciate A that help them to obtain relief from the rigors of life. A is one of the most practical and affordable ways to relax. Of course, some might find (B’s strength). In contrast, the majority of people find such B rather stressful. Most people want to do As(A’s the plural form) that make them laugh.

 

 

 

Grounds2 -Example)

 

According to a study conducted by a team of researchers at Harvard University, As(A’s the plural form) were the most favored thing(way). More than two-thirds of the participants mentioned that they preferred A which can dazzle them with (A’s strength). In the same way, I definitely prefer A when I want to get rid of my stress.

 

 

 

 

 

Grounds2 –Logical)
When friends or family members gather together, they always try to find ways to enjoy their time together. A can be the answer. A puts people in good spirits and connects people by letting them laugh together. On the contrary, Bs(B’s the plural form) can provoke arguments and even emotional conflicts.

 

 

 

Summary – Relieve Stress & Promote Relationships

 

.To summarize, there is little doubt that we should appreciate both B and A. However, I think A is better than B considering the facts that most people do A to laugh away their troubles and to spend time with their loved ones.

 

 

 

<Focus on what they want to do Productive> Template

 

 

 

To begin with, people should be allowed to focus on what they want to (do) A. This is because people are more likely to be motivated to (do) A materials that interest them. Thus, it is probable that people will get greater value from their doing A if they are allowed to do what they enjoy. According to a study conducted by a team of researchers at Harvard University, more than eighty percent of the surveyed people mentioned that they worked harder when they (do) A in which they were interested. The study also found that people generally got great results in (doing) A that matched their area of interest. Based on this study, people work more and become more productive if allowed to (do) A that they find useful and appealing.

 

 

 

Grounds1 –Logical)

 

This is because people are more likely to be motivated to (do) A materials that interest them. Thus, it is probable that people will get greater value from their doing A if they are allowed to do what they enjoy.

 

 

 

Grounds2 –Examples)

 

According to a study conducted by a team of researchers at Harvard University, more than eighty percent of the surveyed people mentioned that they worked harder when they (do) A in which they were interested. The study also found that people generally got great results in (doing) A that matched their area of interest. Based on this study, people work more and become more productive if allowed to (do) A that they find useful and appealing.

 

 

 

<Job Market> Template

 

 

 

 To begin with, a diversified society demands more A’s result (specialist) than B’s result (generalists) in the job market. With the development of technology and improvement of living standards, business and career types are becoming increasingly more diversified. This gives many opportunities for people to discover A’s strength (their own niche area) and become an A’s result (expert). In this respect, if one lacks A’s strength(specialization), he is at a distinct disadvantage over others who have one. In my case, (Today A’s are needed). As the example shows, in order to maintain a competitive edge, people must A(study one subject), which will make them a A’s result(specialist) in one area.

 

 

 

Grounds1 –Logical)

 

With the development of technology and improvement of living standards, business and career types are becoming increasingly more diversified. This gives many opportunities for people to discover A’s strength (their own niche area) and become an A’s result (expert). In this respect, if one lacks A’s strength (specialization), he is at a distinct disadvantage over others who have one.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

<Money Gives Opportunities> Template

 

 

 

To begin with, A enables individuals to have opportunities to engage in many activities that improve their quality of life. With As(A의 복수형), one can afford to A’s stregth1 and to A’s stregth2 such as A’s stregth2 example. A’s stregth2 can invigorate individuals and make their lives more colorful and even more successful. According to a study conducted by a team of researchers at Harvard University, those who A’s stregth2 (take time off to travel) are much happier and have less stress, which means that they are healthier and have greater work productivity. In contrast, those who cannot afford to A’s stregth2 (traveling) often have a lower quality of life as they experience A’s strength did not work (burnout). Consequently, they often switch jobs or lay behind in their career because they have no motivation or energy to do their best. As the study shows, A is important as far as enjoying life and becoming successful in one’s career are concerned.

 

 

 

Grounds1 –Example)

 

According to a study conducted by a team of researchers at Harvard University, those who A’s stregth2 (take time off to travel) are much happier and have less stress, which means that they are healthier and have greater work productivity. In contrast, those who cannot afford to A’s stregth2 (traveling) often have a lower quality of life as they experience A’s strength did not work (burnout). Consequently, they often switch jobs or lay behind in their career because they have no motivation or energy to do their best.

 

 

 

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